Efficiency Lesson
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| Allen Swart |
Efficiency Lesson
The first bird drops like a bad thought.
The second folds mid-argument.
I stay on the wire, the only punctuation left in the sentence.
Humans love efficiency.
One stone, two wings ruined.
I learn math quickly—
the sky is wide,
people throw with purpose.
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This is excellent. I especially love "the only punctuation left in the sentence." I can see it there, on the wire. Excellent.
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Chris, I can't help but imagine you wrote this with a smile on your face. I also think of poets as stone throwers.
ReplyDeleteyou put so much into these few lines - had this reader contemplating - one stone, two birds, love the similes
ReplyDeleteFine work! Sadly, the sky gets narrower and the stones multiply daily, eh?
ReplyDeleteEwww! And also *shriek!* And yes, point well taken.
ReplyDeleteHaha! Excellent write Chris. Damn humans!
ReplyDeleteBrilliant you managed to pack a heavy amount of existential dread and cynical observation into just a few lines🙌
ReplyDeleteI love the simile ‘the first bird drops like a bad thought’, Chris, and the line ‘I stay on the wire, the only punctuation left in the sentence’.
ReplyDeleteThank God, the sky is wide! Yet what does the horizon hold in the face of efficiency.
ReplyDeleteSo much in a few lines. One to think about.
ReplyDeleteVery interesting
ReplyDeleteMuch love
Efficient but heartless! Great poem, Chris!
ReplyDeleteYvette M Calleiro :-)
"the first bird drops like a bad thought"
ReplyDelete"I stay on the wire, the only punctuation left in the sentence."
Some wonderful lines in this, Chris!