Arguing With a Comma
Arguing With a Comma
The last thing I remember was arguing with a comma like it owed me money.
The desk lamp burned its small, inquisitive sun over a crime scene of drafts—
pages crossed out like bad excuses,
metaphors limping away from the scene with their hats in their hands.
Being a writer is mostly moving furniture inside a sentence
until the couch of meaning stops blocking the only window.
I have compared love to weather, grief to an unreturned library book,
hope to a stray dog who chooses you—
and still the page blinks back, white as a dentist’s grin.
Sometimes a poem arrives like a gentleman caller, hat tipped, bearing figs and thunder.
More often it’s a raccoon in the attic, scratching at 3 a.m., demanding to be named.
I chase lines the way children chase kites—convinced the string leads somewhere holy.
I have mistaken ego for inspiration, confused applause with oxygen,
believed a clever stanza could sandbag a flood.
But the truth of it is quieter.
Writing is excavation with a teaspoon.
It is lowering a bucket into the well of your own ribs
and hauling up whatever water agrees to rise.
Some days I strike flint—a spark, a sentence that stands upright like it has knees.
Other days I sweep the workshop of language,
finding only splinters and a stubborn nail of doubt.
Still, I return.
I sit before the blank field.
I bury my hands in its snow.
I wait for the fox of an image to step lightly across it.
The last thing I remember was arguing with a comma like it owed me money.
The first thing I remember is being under something.
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Shared with those Poetics over at DVerse Poets Pub.
This poem ends with the first line of a semi-autobiographical novel by Charles Bukowski, Ham on Rye
This poem ends with the first line of a semi-autobiographical novel by Charles Bukowski, Ham on Rye
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The title hooked me, Chris, and I love the thought of a ‘crime scene of drafts’ and a poem arriving ‘like a gentleman caller, hat tipped, bearing figs and thunder’. These lines also appeal to me:
ReplyDelete‘I sit before the blank field.
I bury my hands in its snow.
I wait for the fox of an image to step lightly across it.’
"Being a writer is mostly moving furniture inside a sentence
ReplyDeleteuntil the couch of meaning stops blocking the only window."
LOVE these lines....and the idea of the "gentleman caller" as well!
Wow!!
ReplyDeleteSo intensly good
Much love
Nicely done!
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