First Snow
The first snow had just fallen,
and for a brief cotton-soft moment,
the sounds of urban life
translated to giggles.
I was huddling in a frosted truck,
waiting for a late train
to take me where I didn't want to go,
wrestling with words.
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This Quadrille (44 word poem) prompted, as usual, by those chill dudes over at DVerse Poets.
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I love how the first snow act as a gentle interlude to all those things we don't want to do.
ReplyDeletelillian here....can't figure out how to not be Anonymous except to include my name. A "brief cotton-soft moment" .... Love these words for a description of being in a first snow moment by oneself.
ReplyDeleteGreat minds and all that, Chris, our poems had the same title! I love that ‘brief cotton-soft moment’ and the ‘sounds of urban life / translated to giggles’.
ReplyDeleteChris, I like how the snow softened the mood, if only for a moment. It makes me wonder where he's headed and the conversation that will unfold there.
ReplyDelete"to take me where I didn't want to go"... how powerful
ReplyDeleteFirst, that there is Chicago (my town)! Second, this is wonderful.
ReplyDeleteThis made me think of so many of my past holidays waiting for transportation to go somewhere I didn't want to go. You really took me there with so few words. Well done.
ReplyDeleteFor a moment, the urban life retreated. Love this line: brief cotton-soft moment. Grace
ReplyDeleteThis is an amazing write, Iove it (Ange)
ReplyDeleteWell-captured pleasant interruption against the inevitable.
ReplyDeleteAnother Anonymous here LOL its Suzanne. I love how for me your quadrille reminds me of the fun we feel at snow and then the reality of what it means to everyday lives not running so smoothly ....💞
ReplyDelete"translated to giggles" is inspired, Chris. Love it.
ReplyDeleteMuch love,
David
SkepticsKaddish.com
Ahh waiting to go where you don't want to go.....perfect time to write a poem like this.
ReplyDeleteAh yes ... snowy solitude. Really enjoyed your quadrille!
ReplyDeleteSnow is lovely until you need to travel somewhere…
ReplyDeleteVery good!
ReplyDeleteLove this line:
"a brief cotton-soft moment"
I love, 'cotton-soft moment'.
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