A Novelinee For a Repaired Affair
For the ninth day of the ninth month it is only fitting to try out the poetry form of novelinee.
Nine line stanzas, iambic pentameter, ninth line rhymes with the eighth, so the rhyme scheme is:
a,b,a,b,c,d,c,d,d
This piece is a "closed novelinee" in which the second stanza mirrors the first, the first line of the poem is the last, and the last line of the first stanza is the first line of the second. I believe it also mirrors it in intent.
Confused?
Don't be. The fine folks over at DVerse will happily explain it to you.
A Novilinee For a Repaired Affair
Four lips tangled, bringing two hearts along -
souls combusted, became one, and transformed.
They beat in synch, a metronome so strong,
like a fire in a mountain cave, it warmed.
We listened and learned, wanted, yearned,
traded safety for the heat we ignite.
Worked and earned, but when we forgot, we burned,
neglecting livelihoods to live in light.
I forget now why we started to fight.
I forget now why we started to fight,
when your good will meant less than my own fear.
At what point does love become way too tight?
When acts and words could no longer endear
because kindness and a full heart were lost.
But my heart is where you always belong,
and now we’re here, we paid Love’s highest cost.
My heart in your teeth is beating and strong.
Four lips tangled, bringing two hearts along.
C.,
ReplyDeleteSo much to love here, most of all the heartbeat of the two lovers reflected so exquisitely in the meter, the words just flowing, "bringing two hearts along" in the telling of their story. Enjoyed this very much.
pax,
dora
Thank you Dora, I appreciate it.
DeleteI enjoyed reading the journey from tangled lips to fighting and back to finding each other again. The words flowed well that I am not aware of the form itself. Thanks for joinining in.
ReplyDeleteThank you Grace.
DeleteLove the love brimming here despite the ugliness of chaos. Love thrives. Will always do.
ReplyDeleteThank you very much
DeleteChris - wow. "My heart in your teeth" - that line is so hot! Amazing! I love this.
ReplyDeleteYours,
David [ben Alexander]
Thanks, my friend!
Deletea love poem that has pith and pathos - I really enjoyed reading this -several times!
ReplyDelete"At what point does love become way too tight?" - that is a killer line!
Thank you so much Laura,
DeleteNice delineation of 'the arc of a love affair': the image of the beating heart between a lover's teeth is striking!
ReplyDeleteThank you Ingrid.
DeleteI like the way this covers a love affair from new love to fights and back. The depiction of love as actual hearts beating in synch, and then one between the other's teeth--striking!
ReplyDeleteI appreciate it a lot, thanks.
DeleteWell done on the theme of romantic love's arc...to get the emphasis of iambic pentameter is difficult.
ReplyDelete"At what point does love become way too tight?
ReplyDeleteWhen acts and words could no longer endear
because kindness and a full heart were lost."
Yes indeed. That where the problems creep in.
Much💖love
Thank you, I appreciate it.
DeleteA beautiful write, Christopher, very romantic! I love this line: "I forget now why we started to fight" <3
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you used the reflection of the form. The turn line is great.
ReplyDeleteExcellent mirror form. I love "heart in your teeth", and the idea
ReplyDeleteof tangled lips.