Hoping To Dream
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HOPING TO DREAM
His woman lies curled beside him
burrowed into his embrace for warmth,
peaceful in their common sleep.
Twelve minutes from now
the alarm will jangle,
another day begins -
another series of problems,
and argument generators,
and tension where there once was love.
The number flips,
eleven minutes now, the clock ticking,
time running out on their truce.
He luxuriates in her proximity,
loving her presence
while his mind tears at him.
When did he cross the line?
Where did he lose it?
At what point did the golden thread
that ran between their souls
become rusted barbed wire?
Ten minutes now,
he snuggles down deeper into his mind,
hoping to dream
they were still in love,
knowing this will be the best few moments of his day.
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Shared with DVerse Poets Pub as a poem overly concerned with numbers.
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©2013 Christopher Reilley
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That's a sad state of affairs. The timekeeping throughout the poem adds to the tension.
ReplyDeleteUsing the clock to count down the minutes is a clever approach to the prompt, Chris, and the contrast between the peacefully sleeping woman and the tension where there once was love. Such a sad situation, especially the ending where he ‘snuggles down deeper into his mind, hoping to dream they were still in love’.
ReplyDeleteIt's interesting the way love can live and be felt in the silence, but the reality of tension easily returns "when the number flips". Great visual. I like this approach to the prompt.
ReplyDeleteWhat a sad tale of a relationship coming apart... maybe love is not enough...
ReplyDeleteI feel sorry that he is clinging to threads of what was, but happy the threads are still there. Great application of the prompt, Chris.
ReplyDeleteInteresting reading. Was this a personal experience back in 2013 and how do you feel about it now?
ReplyDeleteI don't think I've quite experienced what you have described but I think it may be possible that one of my exes may have, unfortunately....